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somewhere deep inside
in the abbys of your closet
lays a broken
old teddy bear
thrown away
whispering curses
which you cant hear
he lay silent
as an act of powerless vengeance
used
your dammed smile
which he cant forget
which haunts him
in his dreams
its always the same
played to the end
then thrown away
voiceless
but not callous
powerless
but not forgetting
not remissive
dont underestimate
his plush rage
one day he will
shout enough

now think about
me
im hidden in your mind
like the toy
in your closet
but i swear
that i feel the same...
©2007-2009 ~cryingforsalvation
:iconcryingforsalvation:

Author's Comments

well,i know i remaind mute for a long time,and im sorry that this is the best i can do...

well,it was written after a very large doze of emotions,so maybe thats why it isnt perfect,and i find this piece personal...fuck,cut the crap,hope you will enjoy it...

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:iconellenrae:
This poem was meant to bring out those niggling little fears of things unsaid or not done.
To voice the unfairness in the way we treat those closest to us.
That's my take on it anyway.
Excellent write. I like it raw with no editing.

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ER Barker
Put down the camera and help that person!~
:iconsumthig:
Fantastic meterphor i loved it brillaint. very intermait and soul shaking makes you quiver from your neck down
matt :superman:

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Maybe what we want is full of uncertainty
maybe what we need to do is return to reallity
:iconangelfetus:
really good.. i agree with the above ;)

hmm it reminds me of a toy i have.. a teddy bear that like with piercings and hold a baseball bat.. hehe
if i remember the name of the series ill tell ya..

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- There Is No Pain In The Process -
:iconfurnosaurus:
oh what an interesting perspective on a feeling.. it really is well encapsulated in the piece...
and the end bit throws in a nice little twisty hook..
(I'm not usually a picky bugger but this threw me and annoyed me as I got sidetracked half way through the piece and was really enjoying it...)
hounts = haunts.
I wish I hadn't got off track because I really enjoyed this... some great imagery well done

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Good taimes...
:iconmisssnowflake:
Personal, irrational fear I used to have of dolls and the like. Good write though.

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